Blog #2, Post C: Review of Two Fellow Classmate's Blogs

This assignment entails me to critique 2 out of 23 fellow student's blogs. I randomly chose these two students because I cannot put a face to their names and it will be easier for me to critique  their blogs because I have no personal connection to them.  Hopefully they won't take it personally, this assignment is only for the purpose to suggest improvements to their blogs.

Student/ Blog Name: Jessica @ Justice395.wordpress.               
Read on 10/7/2013

• Esthetically speaking what I like about Jessica's blog is her choice of colors and format.  She chose colors that are easy on the eyes and appealing.  The format she chose also makes her blog easy to read, i.e. there is a flow to her posts.  
• What I would suggest to Jessica to improve her blog would be to connect direct links to the articles that she mentions on her posts.  I did notice one link, but the other posts did not include them, making it harder for the viewer to understand what her topic is about.  Also, in using the links, I would advice her to cite her sources.
• I would also suggest that she mentions the title of the book from our class and properly cite the information that she used from the book.
• There were a few grammar errors, which are one of my biggest pet peeves (which is why I'm seriously considering a career as a Copy Editor) such as using 'there' instead of 'their'.
• For Post D, we were to state what we thought should be the legal definition of poverty, instead Jessica gave a legal definition as defined by businessdictionary.com.  I would have loved to have read her opinion on that because she made a great statement based on her personal definition of poverty.
• Lastly, I would have liked to have read more of her personal thoughts and opinions with each post.  It appears that the work submitted met just the minimum requirement in terms of sustenance to her blog. 

Student/ Blog Name: Alex @ hh395.wordpress.                         
Read on 10/15/2013

• I enjoyed Alex's Blog.  He followed instructions as to the format requirements that the Professor requested.  He titled his post's accordingly and also gave more information as to what to expect to read on each post, i.e. 'Poverty in Illinois' and 'Definition of poverty' instead of leaving it plain like Blog 1, Post B, etc...
• Esthetically, I would only change the background color of the Blog, black is a great color, one of my personal favorites, but for me it puts a strain on the eye.
• I enjoyed the extra details that were included in the Blog such as videos and pictures.  It makes the Blog come to life and shows that he cares what he puts into it.
• The only other suggestion to better improve his Blog would be to break up his excessive paragraphs.  Ideally, paragraphs should be no more than 4 to 5 sentences and it gives the reader a break to process all that is being read.  A long paragraph could cause someone to just skim through it and not really absorb the information.
• Other than that Alex's Blog is a great example of a great Blog.